Saturday, February 4, 2012

Soul Song

     I waited for hours in our special place. I knew he wouldn’t show up. My Paul was gone; our bed empty and cold. He’d never again wake me with a kiss and a whisper, “Wake up Sleeping Beauty. Let’s make some music.” I rubbed my belly and hummed to the song our music had created.


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This was written for Bluebell Books: Short Story Slam Week 20. Thanks for the opportunity!:
http://bluebellbooks.blogspot.com/2012/02/short-story-slam-week-20-love-in.html
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13 comments:

  1. AnonymousFebruary 22, 2012 at 6:59 PM

    This was sad but still brought joy because you loved and were loved. Just moments or days of knowing you are loved make your whole life special.

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    1. Emanita01February 24, 2012 at 11:11 PM

      Oh, yes, I do agree with danroberson! Emanita01
      I walked this path as well. Nicely penned poem.

      http://fodder4writing.wordpress.com/2011/09/15/magpie-inspiration-82/

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    2. ElizenaFebruary 25, 2012 at 10:17 AM

      Thank you both so much for your visits and comments. I agree that having known love if even for a little while makes one feel special. Blessings to you dan and Emanita.

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  2. jennifayeFebruary 23, 2012 at 8:36 AM

    This gave me goosebumps. So touching and bittersweet :(

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  3. Mark ButkusFebruary 23, 2012 at 11:06 AM

    So very sad yet so very beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

    Cheers,

    Mark Butkus

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  4. ReggieFebruary 24, 2012 at 10:37 AM

    I have to agree that it holds a bittersweet tone, and very well written....lovely.

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  5. TigerbriteFebruary 24, 2012 at 5:13 PM

    Some people can be so horribly cruel and selfish when responsibility for their behaviour sets in. A story well known over centuries. Well expressed indeed into these few words.

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  6. SuzyFebruary 24, 2012 at 8:02 PM

    That's very sad but very nicely written. Perhaps your soul song belongs to someone else who will show up and stay.

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  7. shailFebruary 24, 2012 at 10:37 PM

    Sad indeed. But at least the music remains. Very well written.

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  8. UnknownFebruary 25, 2012 at 10:17 PM

    Sad....calm...beautiful composition of words to bring out all the emotions!

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  9. MISHFebruary 27, 2012 at 11:43 PM

    A lovely piece - wistful & endearing... it reminds me of those "if-only" moments in life... yet also a snippet from a real-life experience.
    Thank you for the wonderful, generous comment you left on my blog.

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  10. michaelMarch 3, 2012 at 8:29 PM

    I love how you incorporated each sense - touch, sight, sound - into such a short piece. Heartbreaking but beautiful.

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  11. DawnApril 12, 2012 at 3:42 PM

    Very emotional...well put in words... :)
    Cheers dear
    Dawn

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